This poem was inspired by meeting a specific person who happened to be a young man. I hope to write about the brave women of the IDF too, but I don’t want to write about someone I haven’t had the experience of meeting in person. They deserve their own poem, and I am waiting until I’m qualified to write it before embarking on that endeavor.
You might consider revising the poem to include the IDF’s all-female tank crews who have also performed bravely and effectively in battle.
This poem was inspired by meeting a specific person who happened to be a young man. I hope to write about the brave women of the IDF too, but I don’t want to write about someone I haven’t had the experience of meeting in person. They deserve their own poem, and I am waiting until I’m qualified to write it before embarking on that endeavor.
Best line concerns them leaving as boys but returning, for those who do return, as men.
This is good. Sad. Beautiful.